CAUSES OF MOTOR VEHICLE ACCIDENTS
Thesis statement:
There are several causes of motor vehicle accidents which are cell phone usage,driving under the influence of alcohol or drugs
Topic sentences:
Firstly,by using cell phone to text or talk the drivers will easily get distracted as they are not be able to pay full attention toward their driving especially when there is unexpected moves made by other drivers.
Secondly,drivers who drink and drive will reduce the ability to drive safely because alcohol slows brain function so drivers under influence of alcohol can't respond to certain situations,to make decisions or to react quickly.
Thirdly,drivers who like to speed will highly risk experiencing accidents because the faster you drive,the slower your reaction will be if you need to prevent an accident.
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